The Thesis owner: Mahnoor saqib
The narrator of “The Black Cat” led to a major negative changes in his behaviour that relate to Freud’s concepts which includes repression, wishful impulse, and displacement.
Your thesis statement is effective and cohesive. You mention Freud and the story “The Black Cat” in the thesis which is good. You also point out what Freud’s concepts that you want to explore and illustrate by using the story “The Black Cat”.
My Suggestion:
- Using “In … story …” to start the thesis.
- In the thesis, can you show the narrator’s major negative changes and his behavior more clearly? In other words, what are the narrator’s major negative changes and his behavior more clearly?
First, in the beginning of the story it shows the narrator’s childhood was spent mostly with his pets which leads to one of Freud’s concepts, repression.
Also, the story discussed wishful impulse by referring the narrator’s behavior towards his cat named Pluto.
Furthermore, Freud’s theory of displacement that is being discussed, when the narrator’s behaviour towards the second cat changed because of his guilt of killing his favorite cat.
Your topic sentence clearly relate to the thesis.
Suggestion:
- You can consider about delete the underline’s part.
- For the first topic sentence, I wonder how the narrator’s childhood was spent mostly with his pets that shows repression.
- For the second topic sentence, can you be more clear about how the narrator towards his cat?
- For the third topic sentence, you can consider about change “Freud theory displacement” to “Freud’s theory of displacement”?
